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What do you think should the government of South Korea focus on?

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I think the government of my country should focus on vaccine of covid19. most of self-ownership are lossing their money since the goverment regulate the restaurant and all store must close until 10pm and citizens must meet lower 4 people when they meet each other. this regualtions keep going for 1year. so many self-ownership should get a loan and finally they close their store. I heard the news some of them kill themselves. I hope everyone come back like before.

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Hi Tobby!

Governments in emerging economies have, over the decades, tried many different policy agendas to stimulate development, accelerate growth, alleviate poverty, and achieve any number of other goals to mixed success. Nowadays, the urgent problem is regarding the pandemic. They work really hard on how to improve their country and their people as well. Your ideas are great. Thanks for sharing. :) 

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I think the government of my country should focus on vaccine of covid19. 
>>I think the government of my country should focus on the vaccine for Covid19. 

most of self-ownership are lossing their money since the goverment regulate the restaurant and all store must close until 10pm and citizens must meet lower 4 people when they meet each other. 
>> Most self-owned business people are loosing money ever since the government regulated that restaurants and all stores should close by 10 pm and citizens must no be with 5 or more people. 

this regualtions keep going for 1year. 
> This has been for a year now. 

so many self-ownership should get a loan and finally they close their store. 
>> That's why many self-owned businesses get loans and loose their stores totally. 

I heard the news some of them kill themselves. I hope everyone come back like before.
>> I heard some news that some people even kill themselves because of loosing their business. I hope everything will come back to the way it was before. 

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