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What are you going to change in terms of your lifestyle after your resign?

Since I couldn't sleep fully during I work in this company, I want to have enough sleep for a while. And, there will be no income after a month, so I may reduce my spending. And, I will spend most of my day for finding a way to go to the Philippines.

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Hi Hannah!

Following a healthy lifestyle, regardless of age, will have numerous health benefits, being proven that it reduces the risk of cardiovascular disease, decreases incidence of obesity and diabetes, the risk of malignancy, psychiatric disorders and cognitive dysfunction. After a while, if you stick with these changes, they may become part of your daily routine.

I can see that you are really eager to go back here to the Philippines. I hope you would be successful in it. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Since I couldn't sleep fully during I work in this company, I want to have enough sleep for a while. 
>> Since I couldn't sleep fully because of my job in this company, I want to have enough sleep for a while. 

And, there will be no income after a month, so I may reduce my spending. 
>> CORRECT

And, I will spend most of my day for finding a way to go to the Philippines.
>> I will also spend most of my day for finding a way to go to the Philippines.
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