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Should parents be held responsible for their children\'s behavior? Why or why not?

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I think parents have to hold responsible for their children's behavior.
In Korea, children who are younger than 8 years old don't go to school.
Instead, they learn and get education with their parents.
Their parents taught them before grown up, so if children did bad things, their parents be held responsible.

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Hi John! ^^

Raising a child with good ethics and values is a tough task for every parent. Child¡¯s development is mainly affected by the education, he or she receives from parents. Some People argue that parent should not be held accountable for their child¡¯s act as every parent make their best effort to teach their child how to live and behave in society but how much he/she absorbs is not in anyone¡¯s hands. Every parent tries to provide the best environment, a good role model and more of attention and care to their children.

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I think parents have to hold responsible for their children's behavior.
>> I think parents have to be held responsible for their children's behavior. 

In Korea, children who are younger than 8 years old don't go to school.
>> CORRECT

Instead, they learn and get education with their parents.
>> Instead, they learn and get education from their parents.

Their parents taught them before grown up, so if children did bad things, their parents be held responsible.
>> Parents should teach them before growing up. So if children do bad things, their parents should be held responsible. 
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