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Q.What are the possible benefits of working on weekends?


first, if i work on weekends, i could get more money. in fact, i work on saturday. it is very tired. although i get more money, i wanna relax on weekends. i think the balance of working and relex is more important for me.
second, i can effectively use my time. for example, if i take a rest on weekends, i would wake up lately.but, because i work on saturday, i wake up early, and do more things.

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Q. What are the possible benefits of working on weekends?


first, if i work on weekends, i could get more money. in fact, i work on saturday. it is very tired. 
>>> First, I work on weekends so that I  can get more money. In fact, I work on Saturdays so I feel so tired. 

although i get more money, i wanna relax on weekends. 
>>> Although I receive a lot of money, I want to relax on weekends. 

i think the balance of working and relex is more important for me.
>>> I think the balance between working and relaxing is more important for me but I cannot do it.

second, i can effectively use my time. 
>>> Second, I can effectively make use of my time, I'm productive even on weekends. 

for example, if i take a rest on weekends, i would wake up lately.
>>> For example, if I take a rest on weekends then I would wake up late. 

but, because i work on saturday, i wake up early, and do more things.
>>> But because I work on Saturdays, I wake up early and do more things productively. 
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