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Should parents be held responsible for their children\'s behavior? Why or why not?

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Should parents be held responsible for their children's behavior? Why or why not?

I think that Partents should be held responsible for their children's behavior.
Childrens cannot held responsible for their behavior because theyn are still young.
Partens should discipline their children for misbehaving.
If not, it stops chidren from misbehaving.
it's the lack of responsiblity, partents couldn't control over their misbehaving children.

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Hi Monica! ^^

Raising a child with good ethics and values is a tough task for every parent. Child¡¯s development is mainly affected by the education, he or she receives from parents. Some People argue that parent should not be held accountable for their child¡¯s act as every parent make their best effort to teach their child how to live and behave in society but how much he/she absorbs is not in anyone¡¯s hands. Every parent tries to provide the best environment, a good role model and more of attention and care to their children.

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I think that Partents should be held responsible for their children's behavior.\
>> I think that parents should be held responsible for their children's behavior. 

Childrens cannot held responsible for their behavior because theyn are still young.
>> Children should not held responsible for their behavior because they are still young.

Partens should discipline their children for misbehaving.
>> Parents should discipline their children for misbehaving.

If not, it stops chidren from misbehaving.
>> If not, children will not stop misbehaving. 

it's the lack of responsiblity, partents couldn't control over their misbehaving children.
>> It's a form of lack of responsibility if parents can't control their misbehaving child. 
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