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Q:Why is it that a lot of people are still interested in trying extreme sports?
A:I think its' because that they want to boast that they can do it to someone who they know.
First, if they boast it to someone who know, then the person , someone they know, will show compliment to them.
Second, they feel proud of them if they mastered something, so I think a lot of people are trying extreme sports.
Lastly, someone try extreme sports because, they want to try to play in the world cup so they can get a medal in there.

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Hello Paul,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)





Q: Why is it that a lot of people are still interested in trying extreme sports?

A: I think its' because that they want to boast that they can do it to someone who they know.
>>> I think its' because they want to boast that they can do extreme sport to someone they know.

First, if they boast it to someone who know, then the person, someone they know, will show compliment to them.
>>> First, if they boast it to someone they know, then that person, will give them a compliment. 

Second, they feel proud of them if they mastered something, so I think a lot of people are trying extreme sports.
>>> Second, they feel proud of themselves if they mastered something, so I think a lot of people are trying extreme sports.

Lastly, someone try extreme sports because, they want to try to play in the world cup so they can get a medal in there.
>>> Lastly, someone tries extreme sports because they want to experience playing in the World Cup so that they can get a medal.
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