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Is voting an important responsibility of a citizen? Why or why not?

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Yes, it is very very important responsibility of a citizen.
In the Korea, we vote mayor and president as one country's citizen if we were more than 18 years old.
And we were voting a person who has ability to lead city and country.
If we vote good person, our country will be operated nicely, but if we vote bad one, it will be not like that.
And the decision of voting is our's so I think voting is very important to citizen.

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Hi John! ^^

Voting is necessary. You have the power to decide on the quality of life you want for yourself and future generations. Voting is your chance to stand up for the issues you care about like public transportation, raising minimum wage, or funding local schools. This is your life: take the time to help decide what¡¯s best.

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Yes, it is very very important responsibility of a citizen.
>> Yes, it think it's an important responsibility of a citizen. 

In the Korea, we vote mayor and president as one country's citizen if we were more than 18 years old.
>>In the Korea, we vote for the mayor and the president as a country's citizen if we were more than 18 years old.

And we were voting a person who has ability to lead city and country.
>> And we should vote for people who have the ability to lead a city and a country. 

If we vote good person, our country will be operated nicely, but if we vote bad one, it will be not like that.
>> If we vote for a good person, our country will operate nicely. But if we vote the bad ones, it will not be like that. 

And the decision of voting is our's so I think voting is very important to citizen
>> The decision of voting is in our hands so I think it is a very important responsibility of a citizen. 
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