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Do you think change is good? Why or why not?

Change can be interpreted in very various ways, but in general, I think it's necessary to make a situation better. As we are not perfect in every part, our decision can't be ideal always. So, improving the lowlights, we need to focus on review and find insight.

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Hi Homer! ^^

Change can teach us to adapt and help us develop resilience, but only if we understand our own capacity for growth and learning. When change makes us better, it's because we have learned how to turn a challenging situation to our own advantage, not merely because change happens.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Change can be interpreted in very various ways, but in general, I think it's necessary to make a situation better. 
>>CORRECT

As we are not perfect in every part, our decision can't be ideal always. 
>> CORRECT

So, improving the lowlights, we need to focus on review and find insight.
>> So ,in improving the lowlights, we need to focus in finding the insights. 
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