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I agree. Because the design and atmosphere of the house change depending on the person who lives in the house, I actively agree that the house resembles a house owner. So my room is cute and neat like me. and My room is moderately pink with dolls. My room is very comfortable.

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Hello Jenny,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)




I agree. Because the design and atmosphere of the house change depending on the person who lives in the house, 
>>> I agree because the design and the atmosphere of the house change depending on the person who lives in it.

I actively agree that the house resembles a house owner. 
>>> CORRECT
OR: I actively agree that the house resembles the house owner. 

So my room is cute and neat like me. 
>>> So my room is cute and neat just like I. 

and My room is moderately pink with dolls. My room is very comfortable.
>>> Also my room is moderately pink with dolls and it's very comfortable.
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