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Theme: [ESSAY] What do you think about modern art?
I think modern art is great.
Because we should be adapted to this modern time.
I like modern art. So do my friends.
I think modern arts are beautiful!

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Hi there, Clair!

Here's your corrected composition. Just like you, I'm also impressed with modern arts, especially Cubism, Futurism, Suprematism, and Constructivism. Check out these modern movements, I'm sure you'd find them interesting and innovative. ¢Ü(¢¥¡ä£à)¢Ü

Cheers,
Jean~~



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I think modern art is great.
Because we should be adapted to this modern time.
>> I think modern art is great because we should adapt to this modern time. [Just a reminder, don't start your sentence with the word "because".]

I like modern art. So do my friends.
>> or: I enjoy and am impressed with modern arts, and so do my friends. 

I think modern arts are beautiful!
>> or: If you asked me, modern arts are impressive!
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