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What would you say is the best thing about getting older? Why?

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the best thing about getting older is wisdom of life. because based on what I have experienced in my life, I think I can relax when somethings happens, and maybe I can become good at solving problems.
but.. I want to be young...

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Hi Won! ^^

There are some people who would want to stay young but some don't. Sometimes the best part of being a grown up is actually just that: being an adult. It's the personal and financial success that comes from maturity, the freedom of adulthood, the respect you get from your peers and the joy of working hard to play hard

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the best thing about getting older is wisdom of life.
>>The best thing about getting older is the wisdom in life.

 because based on what I have experienced in my life, I think I can relax when somethings happens, and maybe I can become good at solving problems.
but.. I want to be young...
>> Based on our experiences in our lives, we can relax even when there are problems and you can solve those easily as well. Despite that, I still want to be young. 
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