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What would you say is the best thing about getting older? Why?

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I think looking the world more maturely is the best thing about getting older.
We can experience something, and if we are older than before, we can experience things more.
If we experience the things that are in this world, we can think more about this world,
and finally, we can think something more maturely.
So I think the best thing about getting older is looking the world matyrely.

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Hi John! ^^

There are some people who would want to stay young but some don't. Sometimes the best part of being a grown up is actually just that: being an adult. It's the personal and financial success that comes from maturity, the freedom of adulthood, the respect you get from your peers and the joy of working hard to play hard

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I think looking the world more maturely is the best thing about getting older.
>>I think looking at the world more maturely is the best thing about getting older.

We can experience something, and if we are older than before, we can experience things more.
>> We can experience a lot of things and we can gain more as well. 

If we experience the things that are in this world, we can think more about this world,
and finally, we can think something more maturely.
>> If we experience a lot of things, we can think more critically and more maturely. 

So I think the best thing about getting older is looking the world matyrely.
>>So I think the best thing about getting older is looking at the world more maturely. 
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