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Q:Kindly answer the question in essay form.
What makes your city more special than the other ones in South Korea?

A:The sky is not swollen in the center of Korea, but Jeju Island is happy because the building is low because it cannot be built high because of the wind

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Hi Daniel! ^^

Every city has it's own uniqueness that makes it stand out from others. Peoples perspectives are always different but as citizens of those places, we should be proud of it. thanks for sharing yours :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

The sky is not swollen in the center of Korea, but Jeju Island is happy because the building is low because it cannot be built high because of the wind.
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