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What would you say is the best thing about getting older? Why?

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I think the bad things is more than the best about getting older. the more getting older, the more getting responsibility. only good thing than younger I think is we can drink. that's only good thing.

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Hi Tobby! ^^

There are some people who would want to stay young but some don't. Sometimes the best part of being a grown up is actually just that: being an adult. It's the personal and financial success that comes from maturity, the freedom of adulthood, the respect you get from your peers and the joy of working hard to play hard

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I think the bad things is more than the best about getting older. 
>> I think there would be more bad things than good things when I get older. 

the more getting older, the more getting responsibility. 
>> The more I get older, the more responsibilities I will have. 

only good thing than younger I think is we can drink. that's only good thing.
>> The only good thing that I can do when I'm younger is drink a lot. 
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