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My greatest gift is my mom and dad because my parents are my everything.
I can't live when without my parents.
Anyone wouldn't live without their parents.
I'm really happy because I can feel that my parents love me.
The way I feel is that my parents look at me is very cozy and friendly.
You can feel it even if you don't look like that.
I really love my parents so much.

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Hello Jenny,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work! 

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)



My greatest gift is my mom and dad because my parents are my everything.
>>> CORRECT

I can't live when without my parents.
>>> I can't live without my parents. 

Anyone wouldn't live without their parents.
>>> CORRECT

I'm really happy because I can feel that my parents love me.
>>> CORRECT

The way I feel is that my parents look at me is very cozy and friendly.
>>> The way my parents look at me feels very cozy and friendly. 

You can feel it even if you don't look like that.
>>> You can feel it even if you don't look at them. 

I really love my parents so much.
>>> CORRECT
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