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What makes your city more special than the other ones in South Korea?

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I think the technology of making animation makes my city more special than other ones in my country.
Because my city is known for the technology of animation, and a lot of festival held in my city, Bucheon.
I don't think my city is good at it because there is nothing that I know about my country's animation.
But a lot of people saying my city, Bucheon is good at animation technology, so I am thinking my city is good at animation technology.
Because of it, there is a lot of festivals about animation, and a lot of museum about animation in my city.
So I think the technology of making animation makes my city more special than other ones in my country.

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Hi  John! ^^

That sound fascinating! Maybe I can go to your city some day and experience that too. L( 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I think the technology of making animation makes my city more special than other ones in my country.
>> CORRECT

Because my city is known for the technology of animation, and a lot of festival held in my city, Bucheon.
>> It is because my city is known for it and we have a lot of festivals held here too, Buncheon. 

I don't think my city is good at it because there is nothing that I know about my country's animation.
>> CORRECT

But a lot of people saying my city, Bucheon is good at animation technology, so I am thinking my city is good at animation technology.
>> Although a lot of people say that Bucheon is a city where there is goof animation technology. 

Because of it, there is a lot of festivals about animation, and a lot of museum about animation in my city.
And because of this, we have festivals and museums related to it. 

So I think the technology of making animation makes my city more special than other ones in my country.
>> So I think this is why my city is more specials than others in my country. 
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