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My city is really peaceful. Even though some earthquaqes happened in korea. My city wasnt effected that much. And it is located in the middle of korea so, we can go everywhere in shorter time.

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Hi  Lucy! ^^

That sound fascinating! It sounds so convenient to live in your city. Maybe I can go to your city some day and experience that too. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

My city is really peaceful. 
>> CORRECT

Even though some earthquaqes happened in korea. 
>> Even though there were some earthquakes that happened here in Korea, our city is not affected that much. 

My city wasnt effected that much. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

And it is located in the middle of korea so, we can go everywhere in shorter time.
>> My city is also located in the middle of Korea so we can go everywhere within a shorter time. 
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