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HOMEWORK:
Do you think it is important to wear fashionable clothes? Why or why not?

I think the answer of this question will change by one's values. In my opinion I don't think wearing fashionable clothes are not that important. If we wear what we feel comfortable and what we like, then, this will satisfy myself. My value is not really in wearing fashionable clothes. No matter what we wear, most people judge us with our mind not what we are wearing. Well, but there is nothing wrong about wearing fashionable clothes. Some people enjoy wearing fashionable clothes and they are satisfied with that. Some people would think wearing fashionable clothes are important but some people are not. In my personable opinion I don't feel the importance of wearing fashionable clothes.

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Hello Claire!
Thanks for the composition today. See you tomorrow!
~~Teacher Kate

I think the answer of this question will change by one's values. 
>>I think the answer to this question will change depending on one's values. 
In my opinion I don't think wearing fashionable clothes are not that important. 
>>CORRECT!
If we wear what we feel comfortable and what we like, then, this will satisfy myself. 
>>If we wear what we feel comfortable in and what we like, then, this will satisfy us. 
My value is not really in wearing fashionable clothes. 
>>Wearing fashionable clothes is not really that important to me. 
No matter what we wear, most people judge us with our mind not what we are wearing. 
>>No matter what we wear, most people will judge us for our mind/personality and not what we are wearing. 
Well, but there is nothing wrong about wearing fashionable clothes. 
>>CORRECT!
Some people enjoy wearing fashionable clothes and they are satisfied with that. 
>>CORRECT!
Some people would think wearing fashionable clothes are important but some people are not. 
>>Some people would think wearing fashionable clothes is important but some people do not. 
In my personable opinion I don't feel the importance of wearing fashionable clothes.
>>In my personal opinion, I don't feel the importance of wearing fashionable clothes.
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