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Do you want to work on weekends? Why or why not?

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Unless I have a special schedule, I like to the chance to work on weekends.
Because I can be gave higher wage than on weekdays.
However, If I must work on every weekends, I will feel very tired.
Although It helps me promote in my workplace, I don't want it.
I love my freedom, so my weekends are very precious.
I can many acting that I can't do ordinarily. For example, I can take a sleep all day, go to the other countries, hang out friends or date boyfriend on weekends.
I love sleeping. I love soft and relaxed feeling on a bed.
Although I'm not tired, the dreams when I have sleeping are make me happy.
I'm a little bit lazy, But I love activity too.
The special experience memory improves me on busy weekdays, and cheer me up.
I want to do more things always. It is very much that I can't experience yet.
On this summer, I hope I can play anything in the water after I'm vaccinated for COVID-19.
Unless I don't be vaccinated, I can't feel free on this vacation.

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Hello Kang!

Thank you for this answer.  Don't forget to read and use the corrections to improve your sentences. Keep it up!  ^^


-T. Maine


Unless I have a special schedule, I like to the chance to work on weekends.

>>Unless I have a special appointment, I like to take the chance to work on weekends.
Because I can be gave higher wage than on weekdays.

>>It is because I can be given a higher wage than on weekdays.
However, If I must work on every weekends, I will feel very tired.

>>However, if I must work every weekends, I am surely going to feel tired.
Although It helps me promote in my workplace, I don't want it.

>>Although it helps me to get promoted in my workplace, I still don't want it.
I love my freedom, so my weekends are very precious.

>>I love my freedom on weekends, so these days are precious to me.
I can many acting that I can't do ordinarily. For example, I can take a sleep all day, go to the other countries, hang out friends or date boyfriend on weekends.

>>I can do many activities which I can't do in ordinary days for example, sleeping all day, traveling abroad, hanging out with friends, or dating with my boyfriend on weekends.
I love sleeping.

>>Correct.

I love soft and relaxed feeling on a bed. 

>>I love the soft and relaxed feeling on the bed.
 Although I'm not tired, the dreams when I have sleeping are make me happy. 

>>Although I'm not tired, the dreams that I have while sleeping make me happy.
I'm a little bit lazy, But I love activity too. 

>>I'm a little bit lazy, but I love doing some activities too.
The special experience memory improves me on busy weekdays, and cheer me up.

>>A special memorable experience motivates and cheers me up to work on busy weekdays.
I want to do more things always.

>>I alwasys want to do more things.

It is very much that I can't experience yet.

>>It is impossibe to happen.

On this summer, I hope I can play anything in the water after I'm vaccinated for COVID-19.

>>This summer, I hope I can go swimming after I get vaccinated for Covid-19.
Unless I don't be vaccinated, I can't feel free on this vacation.

>>If I don't have the vaccine, I can't feel free this vacation.

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