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I think we will linit using abusive language.
and we should keep pornography out of advertising.
When I solve the math problem I can¡¯t find the answer of desxriptive question.
I think it is a problem that needs fixing.

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Hello Jenny,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work! 

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)




I think we will linit using abusive language.
>>> I think we should limit using abusive language.

and we should keep pornography out of advertising.
>>> Also, we should keep pornography out of advertisements.

When I solve the math problem I can¡¯t find the answer of desxriptive question.
>>> When I solve the math problem I can¡¯t find the answer to the descriptive question.

I think it is a problem that needs fixing.
>>> I think it is a problem that needs to be fixed.
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