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I want to be a better conversationalist and I think this relates to how much I read and know. Of course, I can't talk with professional knowledge on all topics, but I want to talk more freely on various topics as I meet various people. Once I have much to contribute, learn how to talk about it with others. Besides, no one can read about or know everything, so it will be refreshing to learn from others those things when we don't have the time to put effort into ourselves.

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Happy Friday Gianna!  I hope that you continue to inspire other people. Have a great weekend :)
~Aki :)
I want to be a better conversationalist and I think this relates to how much I read and know. 
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>>  I want to be a better speaker and I think this can be associated with how much I read and know.
Of course, I can't talk with professional knowledge on all topics, but I want to talk more freely on various topics as I meet various people. 
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>>  Naturally, I can't talk about professional knowledge at all time, but I want to express my self freely on different topics as I meet various people.
Once I have much to contribute, learn how to talk about it with others. 
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>>Once I have much to bestow, I usually share it to others.
Besides, no one can read about or know everything, so it will be refreshing to learn from others those things when we don't have the time to put effort into ourselves.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> After all, no one knows about everything, so it will be energizing to learn from those things when we don't have availability to put effort into ourselves.
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