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Sadly, we are judged by social status or possessions from the others. We are also evaluated by physical appearance especially if it is the first sight. Although, we try not to judge people by social status, many people feel that they want to be close with wealthy people or have a close relationship because we expect to get advantages from them someday. We can easily see couples who really loved each other before marriage but many people have complained about they financial situation and had conflicts between them. So many singles prefer to meet someone who has stable job and enough money because it make couples to manage their life easy. Of course, people who are successful, honorable and respected from others usually have enough assets because their position in the society is high. That's why people think that success in the society is the more important than training to get fame, honor and being kind. I think government make our country better places to live by various policies.

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Hi there Mr. Hwang! You surprised me by doing all your homework! Anyways, questions are becoming boring hahaha but based on reality! Enjoy answering!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Sadly, we are judged by social status or possessions from the others.
>>> Sadly, we are judged by people based on our social status or possessions.
 We are also evaluated by physical appearance especially if it is the first sight. 
>>>  We are also evaluated by physical appearance especially on first meeting.
Although, we try not to judge people by social status, many people feel that they want to be close with wealthy people or have a close  relationship because we expect to get advantages from them someday.
>>> Although, we try not to judge people by social status, many people feel that they want to be closed with wealthy people or have a close  relationship because we expect to get advantages from them someday.
 We can easily see couples who really loved each other before marriage but many people have complained about they financial situation and had conflicts between them.
>>>  We can easily see couples who really loved each other before marriage but many people have complained about their financial situation and had conflicts between them.
 So many singles prefer to meet someone who has stable job and enough money because it make couples to manage their life easy. 
>>>  So many singles prefer to meet someone who has a stable job and enough money because it makes couples to manage their life easy. 
Of course, people who are successful, honorable and respected from others usually have enough assets because their position in the society is high. 
>>> Of course, people who are successful, honorable and respected by others usually have enough assets because their position in the society is high. 
That's why people think that success in the society is the more important than training to get fame, honor and being kind.
>>> CORRECT
 I think government make our country better places to live by various policies.
>>>  I think the government should make our country better places to live by various policies.
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