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I think Korea is a safe country generally but I'm not sure it is also safe to women. As I'm a woman, I'm interested in criminal news about women. But, sad to say, I can see several sexual abuse news on the headlines' of news platforms everyday. Shockingly, the assailant of sexual abuse don't be ruled with long imprisonment. The judiciary should change their mind to rule sexual abuse. I hope they have more gender-sensitive perspective so that the victims no longer suffer.

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Hello, Solyna! ^^
Thank you so much for doing your homework.
Enjoy your night! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

I think Korea is a safe country generally but I'm not sure it is also safe to women. 
>> I think Korea is a safe country generally but I'm not sure if it is also safe for women. 

As I'm a woman, I'm interested in criminal news about women. 
>> As a woman, I'm interested in criminal news about women. 

But, sad to say, I can see several sexual abuse news on the headlines' of news platforms everyday. 
>> But, sad to say, I can see several sexual cases of abuse on the news headlines of some news platforms every day. 

Shockingly, the assailant of sexual abuse don't be ruled with long imprisonment. 
>> Shockingly, the assailant of sexual abuse doesn't go punished or sentenced with long imprisonment. 

The judiciary should change their mind to rule sexual abuse. 
>> The judiciary should change its mind to rule out sexual abuse. 

I hope they have more gender-sensitive perspective so that the victims no longer suffer.
>> I hope they have a more gender-sensitive perspective so that the victims will no longer suffer.
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