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Q:Do many people in your country study abroad? Why do you think they study abroad?
A:They do not, but I think most of they want to.
First, if they study abroad, then they can learn more things in the school.
Second, if they study abroad, then it means they are good at stuyding, so I think most of people want to boast it to other people.
Lastly, if they study abroad, then they can know more things about other country's culture, so I think they want to study abroad.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


They do not, but I think most of they want to.

>> They do not, but I think most of them  want to.
First, if they study abroad, then they can learn more things in the school.

>> I think if they study abroad, then they can learn more in the school there.
Second, if they study abroad, then it means they are good at stuyding, so I think most of people want to boast it to other people.

>> Second, if they study abroad then it means they are good at studying, so I think most people want to boast about it to other people.
Lastly, if they study abroad, then they can know more things about other country's culture, so I think they want to study abroad.

>> Lastly, if they study abroad, they can know more about other countries' cultures, so I think that's why they want to study abroad.

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