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What are the advantages and disadvantages of cooking your food at home?

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Advantages of cooking at home is clean, I know what cooking in food. and cooking at home than at outside eat cheep. disadvantages of cooking at home is after cooking clean myself. and if I can¡¯t good cook so miring. and I can¡¯t taste the special brand.

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Hello Jeong Won,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

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What are the advantages and disadvantages of cooking your food at home?


Advantages of cooking at home is clean, I know what cooking in food. 
>>> One of the advantages of cooking at home is that it's clean because you know how did you prepare the food and you cooked it yourself. 

and cooking at home than at outside eat cheep. 
>>> Another advantage is that it's cheaper to eat at home than in a restaurant. 

disadvantages of cooking at home is after cooking clean myself. 
>>> A disadvantage of cooking at home is that after cooking and eating you need to clean and tidy up. 

and if I can¡¯t good cook so miring. and I can¡¯t taste the special brand.
>>> Another is that if you're not good at cooking then you cannot taste the delicious cuisines of restaurants. 
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