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Nowadays employment options are changing and employees cannot rely on having the same job and workin

작성자: 황*하
2021-06-24 374

회원님의 영작문

The recruitment conditions have changed tremendously since robots and modern devices used at work. The manual workers who don't have professional skill have fired from the company and these machines have done human's work. There are a lot of platform companies these days and customers feel convenient use their services. However, those have created a lot of part time jobs which are not guaranteed worker's basic welfare such as national pension and health insurance. The platform works have been suffering from the unreasonable working conditions. In addition, these companies have threaten existing businesses so many workers have had concerns if they would be fired. This phenomenon can't be avoided, so my ideas to solve problems are providing free education and make them get trained in specific areas. I believe that robots can't substitute human's work and there are still jobs for us. So, people need to prepare our future although, what will be changed.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

LOVELY DAY TO YOU MR. HWANG~! ^^
Change your thoughts and you will change your world.
Facing the study with the right mindset can change our chances of learning everything necessary. At the same time, having learned these contents will make our way of interpreting the world change.
Have a great time!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
The recruitment conditions have changed tremendously since robots and modern devices are used at work. 
>>> CORRECT
The manual workers who don't have professional skill have fired from the company and these machines have done human's work. 
>>> Laborers who don't have professional skills are fired from the company and these machines can do human's work. 
There are a lot of platform companies these days and customers feel convenient to use their services. 
>>> CORRECT
However, those have created a lot of part time jobs which are not guaranteed worker's basic welfare such as national pension and health insurance.
>>> CORRECT 
 The platform works have been suffering from the unreasonable working conditions. 
>>> CORRECT
In addition, these companies have threaten existing businesses so many workers have had concerns if they would be fired. 
>>> CORRECT
This phenomenon can't be avoided, so my ideas to solve problems are providing free education and make them get trained in specific areas.
>>> CORRECT
 I believe that robots can't substitute human's work and there are still jobs for us.
>>> CORRECT
 So, people need to prepare our future although, what will be changed.
>>>  So, people need to prepare for their future although, it's going to change.
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