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I think I enjoyed festivals more when I was still younger.
When I was a little kid, a lot of festivals were very interested because I've never seen it.
But now, I don't interested in a lot of festivals.
There are so many people and I don't like it.
So I think I enjoyed festivals more when I was still younger.

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Hi John! ^^

Festivals are really great. People gather together to celebrate and have a good time. Hopefully, this virus would be gone so that we can go back to enjoying it again. 

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I think I enjoyed festivals more when I was still younger.
>> CORRECT

When I was a little kid, a lot of festivals were very interested because I've never seen it.
>> When I was a little kid, a lot of festivals were very interesting but I wasn't able to see it. 

But now, I don't interested in a lot of festivals.
>> But now, I'm not interested in festivals anymore. 

There are so many people and I don't like it.
>> CORRECT

So I think I enjoyed festivals more when I was still younger.
>>CORRECT
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