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Did you enjoy festivals better when you were still younger or do you enjoy them more now that you are older?

When I was young, I enjoyed festivals with many people and loud noise.
In the past, I want to miss the festivals every year something like film festival.
Now It is better in a quite place where it is not very crowded.
Sadly, I get tired of something in getting older whatever I want.

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Hi Monica! ^^

That's true! When there was no pandemic, festivals are really great. People gather together to celebrate and have a good time. Hopefully, this virus would be gone so that we can go back to enjoying it again. 

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When I was young, I enjoyed festivals with many people and loud noise.
>> When I was young, I enjoyed festivals with many people and loud noises. 

In the past, I want to miss the festivals every year something like film festival.
>> I miss the festivals in the past where it was like in the films. 

Now It is better in a quite place where it is not very crowded.
Sadly, I get tired of something in getting older whatever I want.
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