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I want to be a Doraemon.
Because Doraemon has very cute and round hand.
I think Doraemon\'s charm is very cute round body and cute personality.
and I like red bean bread and Doraemon like red bean bread too.
I think Doraemon and I look just each other.
also, Doraemon has magic pouch that brings out anything.
I really want to get Doraemon's magic pouch.
So, I want to be a Doraemon character.

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Hello Jenny,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

Keep up the good work!

Sincerely,
Teacher Annie (^^)



I want to be a Doraemon.
>>> I want to be Doraemon.

Because Doraemon has very cute and round hand.
>>> Because Doraemon has very cute and round hands.

I think Doraemon\'s charm is very cute round body and cute personality.
>>> I think Doraemon's charm is his very cute, round body and cute personality.

and I like red bean bread and Doraemon like red bean bread too.
>>> also, I like red bean bread and Doraemon likes red bean bread too.

I think Doraemon and I look just each other.
>>> I think Doraemon and I look just very similar to each other.

also, Doraemon has magic pouch that brings out anything.
>>> Moreover, Doraemon has a magic pouch that brings out anything.

I really want to get Doraemon's magic pouch.
>>> CORRECT

So, I want to be a Doraemon character.
>>> CORRECT
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