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Do you think tourism will harm the earth?

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2021-06-30 261

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I agree that sentence.
When I visit a attract destination, there were many trash out the trash can.
When I go to a festival, I saw the trees whose branches were broken.
Especially, the nation that have many population have more problems.
One trash make other one. People throw a trash in dumps.
In addition, airplanes that we use to travel make much air pollutant.
People buy more than daily, the things will be waste easily. the situation makes more trash.
If we travel to eco-friendly city, It might be good effect.
The pros about earth of tourism is that the tourist experience eco-friendly life in the city and when they turn their city, they spread the way of the life.
Tourism can help economy in destination's city, but It can pollute the city and the earth.
We should try to save the environment anywhere.

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You have nice and meaningful ideas, Kang! I hope you can also encourage other travelers to be responsible just like you.-Faith-
I agree that sentence.
>> I agree on that sentence.
When I visit a attract destination, there were many trash out the trash can.
>> When I visited a tourist attraction, there was too much trash there.
When I go to a festival, I saw the trees whose branches were broken.
>> When I went to a festival, I saw the trees which branches were broken.
Especially, the nation that have many population have more problems.
>> Especially, the nations that have high population have more problems.
One trash make other one. 
>> One trash makes another one. 
People throw a trash in dumps.
 >>People throw trash in dumps.
In addition, airplanes that we use to travel make much air pollutant.
>> CORRECT
OR Furthermore, airplanes cause air pollution.
People buy more than daily, the things will be waste easily. 
>> People buy more daily and the packagings become waste.
the situation makes more trash.
>> Therefore, this situation causes more trash.
If we travel to eco-friendly city, It might be good effect.
>> If we travel to an eco-friendly city, it might be good.
The pros about earth of tourism is that the tourist experience eco-friendly life in the city and when they turn their city, they spread the way of the life.
>> The pros about tourism is that when tourists experience an eco-friendly life in another city, they can share that city's way of life when they return home.
Tourism can help economy in destination's city, but It can pollute the city and the earth.
>> Tourism can help the economy of the destination city, but it can pollute the city and the Earth.
We should try to save the environment anywhere.
>> CORRECT
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