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Last Saturday I went to the beautiful cafe with my daughter.
This week is final exam period of her, so she has to lots of studying.
Even though she has her own room at home, she wants to go to a cafe to study.
I forced to go there together and read books.
I drove and bought a pizza for her at the cafe.
There was quiet and nice place for concentration.

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Hi Lily,
Thank you for your ideas this morning!
Have a nice day!
Teacher ELLY.
Saturday
Last Saturday, I went to a beautiful cafe with my daughter.
CORRECT!
or>>Last Saturday, my daughter and I went to a beautiful cafe.
This week is final exam period of her, so she has to lots of studying.
>>This week is her final exams, so she has lots of studying to do.
Even though she has her own room at home, she wants to go to a cafe to study.
CORRECT!
or>>Even though she has her own room at home, she prefers to study in a cafe.
I forced to go there together and read books.
>>I forced her to go there with me and read some books.
I drove and bought a pizza for her at the cafe.
CORRECT1
or>>I drove to buy her a pizza at the cafe.
There was quiet and nice place for concentration.
>>It was a quiet and nice place for her to concentrate on her studies.

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