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There are a lot of convenience foods have launched at the market because of many people's demands. It definitely help people to reduce their time to prepare their meals as well as the tasty is good. There is TV program which is about the convenience foods that is invented by guests. Every two weeks, the winner is selected by professionals and his/her food has rolled out at the convenience stores. People really love to eat it because it is approved on TV and it gives people opportunity to taste celebrity's food. I was shocked that young people prefer to go to the convenience store. I am little bit worried about their nutrition because it's junk food. They don't want to spend their time to cook and they would like to use their time for fun activities or something that improve their skill. I have bought these food many times. It definitely has advantages especially early morning. I would rather sleep more than eating breakfast and I usually go to the convenience store for my meals.

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There are a lot of convenience foods have launched at the market because of many people's demands. 
>>> There are a lot of convenience foods which have launched at the market because of many people's demands. 
It definitely help people to reduce their time to prepare their meals as well as the tasty is good. 
>>> It definitely helps people to reduce their time to prepare their meals with a satisfying taste. 
There is TV program which is about the convenience foods that is invented by guests.
>>> There is a TV program which is about the convenience foods which are invented by guests.
 Every two weeks, the winner is selected by professionals and his/her food has rolled out at the convenience stores.
>>>  Every two weeks, the winner is selected by professionals and his/her food will be roll out at the convenience stores.
 People really love to eat it because it is approved on TV and it gives people opportunity to taste celebrity's food.
>>> CORRECT
 I was shocked that young people prefer to go to the convenience store. 
>>> CORRECT
I am little bit worried about their nutrition because it's junk food.
>>> I am a bit worried about their health because it's junk food.
 They don't want to spend their time to cook and they would like to use their time for fun activities or something that improves their skill. 
>>> CORRECT
I have bought these food many times.
>>> CORRECT
 It definitely has advantages especially early morning. 
>>> It definitely has advantages especially early in the morning. 
I would rather sleep more than eating breakfast and I usually go to the convenience store for my meals.
>>> CORRECT
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