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Give me one festival in your hometown that you enjoy the most.

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Our hometown is known for technology of animation.
So there is a big festival about animation at my hometown, and we can see a lot of animations.
And at my memory, in the festival, there are a lot of contests so some animations can get prices about the festival.
And maybe anyone can enjoy to that festival or contests.
Because of these reasons, in my hometown, animation festival is most famous and I enjoy the most.

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Hi John ! ^^

That sounds like a fun festival! Festivals are really great. People gather together to celebrate and have a good time. Hopefully, this virus would be gone so that we can go back to enjoying it again. 

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Our hometown is known for technology of animation.
>> Our hometown is known for the technology of animation.

So there is a big festival about animation at my hometown, and we can see a lot of animations.
>> So there is a big festival about animation in my hometown where we can see a lot of animations.

And at my memory, in the festival, there are a lot of contests so some animations can get prices about the festival.
>> Based on my memory, there are a lot of contests where some animators can get prices from the festival. 

And maybe anyone can enjoy to that festival or contests.
<< Anyone can enjoy the contests. 

Because of these reasons, in my hometown, animation festival is most famous and I enjoy the most.
>> Because of these reasons, I like this festival in my hometown. 
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