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What are the ways people with problems sleeping can do to help them cope with it?

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There are many ways to handle with sleeping problems. For example, listening to music or ASMR, placing aroma candles beside the bed, and just staying until they could sleep.
Listening to music is the most common way that people use when they want to sleep. Calm music makes people¡¯s mind relieve and can concentrate on their sleep. The case of ASMR has the same effect with music. Placing aroma candles is also the general way to sleep. The smell of it helps people relaxed and easy to sleep. For this reason, many people prefer to smell of candles and use them. The last one is awaking up until they sleep. They just spend their time to play with cellphone or do something else. However, they don¡¯t try to sleep and just wait to sleep.

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There are many ways to handle with sleeping problems. 
>>> There are many ways to handle sleeping problems.    
For example, listening to music or ASMR, placing aroma candles beside the bed, and just staying until they could sleep.
>>> OR: For example, listening to music or ASMR, placing aroma candles beside the bed, and just staying still until they could sleep.   
Listening to music is the most common way that people use when they want to sleep. 
>>> correct 
Calm music makes people¡¯s mind relieve and can concentrate on their sleep. 
>>> OR: Calm music makes people¡¯s mind relieved so they can concentrate on their sleep.   
The case of ASMR has the same effect with music. 
>>> OR: ASMR has the same effect like music.   
Placing aroma candles is also the general way to sleep. 
>>>  correct  
The smell of it helps people relaxed and easy to sleep. 
>>> The smell of it helps people relax and sleep easily.    
For this reason, many people prefer to smell of candles and use them. 
>>> For this reason, many people prefer to smell candles and use them.   
The last one is awaking up until they sleep. 
>>>  The last one is staying awake until they feel sleepy.  
They just spend their time to play with cellphone or do something else. 
>>> correct  
However, they don¡¯t try to sleep and just wait to sleep.
>>>  OR: However, they don¡¯t try to fall asleep and just wait until they feel sleepy.

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