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What is the first thing that you always do when you visit a new place? Why?

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I look around there and I find some markets that I can buy somethings.
If I look around at somewhere that I went the first time, I can find great places to me.
And if I find some markets, I can buy some foods and things that I need.
And almost my friends ask the roads or streets but I don't ask somethings like that.
I find some streets or roads by myself, so I don't ask about it.
So I just look around there and I find some markets that I can buy somethings if I went to a new place.

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Hi John! ^^

You can¡¯t imagine how different life is in another place until you see for yourself. Everything from work to family to beliefs to interests is not what you might expect from your own experience. The different setting will also help you discover and consider fresh ideas you hadn¡¯t thought of before. You¡¯ll come home with different notions and possibilities. By being exposed to new places, people and cultures, you¡¯ll develop a wider world view. So you have to experience everything when you visit a new place. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

I look around there and I find some markets that I can buy somethings.
>> I look around there and I find some markets where I can buy things.
 
If I look around at somewhere that I went the first time, I can find great places to me.
>> If I look around, I can find great new places to me. 

And if I find some markets, I can buy some foods and things that I need.
>> If I find markets, I will buy food and things that I need. 

And almost my friends ask the roads or streets but I don't ask somethings like that.
>> Most of my friends would ask for directions but I usually don't. 

I find some streets or roads by myself, so I don't ask about it.
>> I usually find streets and roads by myself. 

So I just look around there and I find some markets that I can buy somethings if I went to a new place.
>>So I just look around there and I find some markets where I can buy things when I go to a new place. 

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