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Eggs can be used for many purposes.

First, We can use it to eat. and There are many ways to eat eggs. We can have fried eggs or boiled eggs.

Second, We also make bread or cake out of eggs.

Third, Our ancestors are used eggs to get rid of bruises. We somtimes use this way.

Fourth, Singers sometimes eat eggs to warm up their voices. But doesn't smell fishy if you eat raw eggs? haha

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Eggs can be used for many purposes.
>>> CORRECT

First, We can use it to eat. and There are many ways to eat eggs. We can have fried eggs or boiled eggs.
>>> First, we can eat it and there are many ways to cook eggs. We can have fried eggs or boiled eggs.

Second, we also make bread or cake out of eggs.
>>> CORRECT
OR: Second, we can also bake bread and cakes using eggs as an ingredient.

Third, Our ancestors are used eggs to get rid of bruises. We somtimes use this way.
>>> Third, our ancestors used eggs to get rid of their bruises. We sometimes use it this way.

Fourth, Singers sometimes eat eggs to warm up their voices. But doesn't smell fishy if you eat raw eggs? haha
>>> Fourth, singers sometimes eat eggs to warm up their voices. But it doesn't smell fishy if you eat raw eggs.
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