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What is the first thing that you always do when you visit a new place? why?

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Look around.
Why? because i need where i am.

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Hi Emma! ^^

You can¡¯t imagine how different life is in another place until you see for yourself. Everything from work to family to beliefs to interests is not what you might expect from your own experience. The different setting will also help you discover and consider fresh ideas you hadn¡¯t thought of before. You¡¯ll come home with different notions and possibilities. By being exposed to new places, people and cultures, you¡¯ll develop a wider world view. So you have to experience everything when you visit a new place. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

Look around.
Why? because i need where i am.
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