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What kind of support should children give their aging parents?

작성자: 이*현
2021-07-07 547

회원님의 영작문

I think children don\'t have to support their parents. They don\'t have the responsibility.
It is best present to take a time with them.
The way to support their parents is to take care of myself.
To keep my health is to help to keep my parent\'s own time.
To save my safety relieves their mind.
To become independent economically and mentally from my parents give them freedom from obligation as parents.
I learn the contents from my parents.
My parents don\'t want to take care of them above me.
Mother said, \"I raise you that you think yourself above all. (not selfishness)
So you shouldn\'t care other people giving up your precious, even if she is me.
I will sad when refusing my asking, but the feeling is mine, not yours.\"
For she\'s teaching, I can refuse excepting my private feeling.
So I don\'t make hard myself to take care of them. Some friends envy me for the point.
I love my parents as same as other people.
I can express the love to many ways feeling free, not pressuring.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Kang!

It is crucial to  answer this question since some might say they don't have time to take care of seniors.  However, whatever the elderly people requests you to do for them may make them satisfied in life.  Bear in mind to love your parents at all times. ^^


-T. Maine


I think children don\'t have to support their parents. They don\'t have the responsibility. 

>>I think children don't have to support their parents.  They don't have the responsibility.
 It is best present to take a time with them.

>>It is best to spend some time with them.
 The way to support their parents is to take care of myself.

>>One way to show your support to my parents is to take care of myself.
 To keep my health is to help to keep my parent\'s own time.

>>Keeping myself healthy gives my parents some time for themselves.
 To save my safety relieves their mind.

>>It relieves them if I am safe.

 To become independent economically and mentally from my parents give them freedom from obligation as parents.

>>Becoming independent financially and mentally give my parents the freedom from their obligation.

 I learn the contents from my parents.

>>I have learned these from my parents.

 My parents don\'t want to take care of them above me.

>>My parents don't want me to take care of them more than myself.

 Mother said, \"I raise you that you think yourself above all. (not selfishness)

>>My mom said, "I raised you for you to think about yourself above all. "

 So you shouldn\'t care other people giving up your precious, even if she is me.

>>So I should not take care of other people even if it is my mom.

 I will sad when refusing my asking, but the feeling is mine, not yours.\"

>>I know my mom is sad by refusing my care, but the feeling is hers not mine.

 For she\'s teaching, I can refuse excepting my private feeling.

>>From her own words, I just accept what she advised me.

 So I don\'t make hard myself to take care of them. Some friends envy me for the point.

>>So I don't have a hard time taking care of them.  Some of my friends envy me for my point of view.
 I love my parents as same as other people.

>>I love my parents the same as other people.
 I can express the love to many ways feeling free, not pressuring.

>>I can express my love in many ways such as feeling free and not pressuring them.

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