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Is being poor a valid reason to commit crime? Why or why not?

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I think it is not a valid reason, but I think it is not a inappropriate reason too.
Nowadays, there are a lot of democracy countries so a lot of people get fair opportunities.
But there are people who didn't get fair opportunities in a democracy society.
The poor didn't get same opportunuties in the society because they don't have mush money.
Some people who have particular race, religion, gender get discrimination because of it.
In fact, in the democracy society, some people can't get same opportunities as almost people.
So I think we can't say that commit crime because of poor is not a valid reason.

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Hi John! ^^

One of the reasons that poverty has been associated with crime is because it is an opportunity for the poor to acquire materials that they could otherwise not afford. Poverty can also produce violent crimes because force is an easy way to get a large quantity of goods. Regardless of this, poverty is still not a valid reason to commit crime. Thanks for sharing your answer. :) 

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I think it is not a valid reason, but I think it is not a inappropriate reason too.
>> I think it is not a valid reason but not an inappropriate reason too. 

Nowadays, there are a lot of democracy countries so a lot of people get fair opportunities.
>>Nowadays, there are a lot of democratic countries so a lot of people get fair opportunities.

But there are people who didn't get fair opportunities in a democracy society.
>>Although there are people who didn't. 

The poor didn't get same opportunuties in the society because they don't have mush money.
>> The poor didn't get the same opportunities in the society because they don't have that much money as compared to others. 

Some people who have particular race, religion, gender get discrimination because of it.
>> CORRECT

In fact, in the democracy society, some people can't get same opportunities as almost people.
>> In fact, in the democratic society, some people can't get the  same opportunity as most people do. 

So I think we can't say that commit crime because of poor is not a valid reason.
>>
So I think that we can't say that to commit a crime because of being poor is not a valid reason.

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