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1. most of cheer dancer has nice figure.
2. gorgeous dress is worn on the wedding day.
3. I'm metabolism is fast. so I don't worry that eat at midnight.
4. My clothes wet because of outside It is raining. I have to change outfit.
5. I like snacks. especially I like shrimp snacks.

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Hi, Kylie!
Thank you for the response. You were able to express your ideas however, it's important to also observe the capitalizations and punctuation marks in your sentences. I've given some necessary corrections to this entry. I hope they can be helpful. You did well. ^^
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1. most of cheer dancer has nice figure.
>>Most of the cheer dancers have nice figures. 
2. gorgeous dress is worn on the wedding day.
>>A gorgeous dress is worn on the wedding day. 
3. I'm metabolism is fast. so I don't worry that eat at midnight.
>>My metabolism is fast, so I don't worry about eating at midnight. 
4. My clothes wet because of outside It is raining. 
>>My clothes got wet because it's raining outside. 
I have to change outfit.
>>I have to change my outfit.
5. I like snacks. especially I like shrimp snacks.
>>I like snacks, especially shrimp snacks. 
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