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Is being poor a valid reason to commit crime? Why or why not?

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No, I think poor a valid reason to commit crime. because if you¡¯re really poor must try give help to district offices or social welfare centers have system of something. even though such as ways not use, just poor a valid reason to commit crime is not valid.

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Hi Won! ^^

One of the reasons that poverty has been associated with crime is because it is an opportunity for the poor to acquire materials that they could otherwise not afford. Poverty can also produce violent crimes because force is an easy way to get a large quantity of goods. Regardless of this, poverty is still not a valid reason to commit crime. Thanks for sharing your answer. :) 

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No, I think poor a valid reason to commit crime. because if you¡¯re really poor must try give help to district offices or social welfare centers have system of something.
>> No, I think that being poor is not a valid reason to commit crime because if you're really poor, the government will help you. 

 even though such as ways not use, just poor a valid reason to commit crime is not valid.
>> Even though such ways are not used, being poor is still not a valid reason to commit crime. 
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