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Q:What are some reasons that people become homeless?
A:I think it's because they have not enough money for live.
First, if they become homeless, then some people give them some foods or money.
Second, if they become homeless, then they don't have to buy their house and foods themselves.
Lastly, I think they will buy something they need with their money someday, because they can't live homeless all times.

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Hello Paul!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great¡¦ ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:


I think it's because they have not enough money for live.

>> I think it's because they don't have enough money to live in a house.
First, if they become homeless, then some people give them some foods or money.

>> If they become homeless, some people will give them some food or money.
Second, if they become homeless, then they don't have to buy their house and foods themselves.

>> If that is the case, then they become lazy to buy a house or food for themselves.
Lastly, I think they will buy something they need with their money someday, because they can't live homeless all times.

>> I think they will buy things that they need with their money someday, because they can't be homeless forever.

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