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Do you think that talent is needed to be successful in life? Why or why not?

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If there are a lot of talents to me, it will be very great for living my life.
But, the most important thing is not a talent, it is effort.
For instance, there is a genius, but he or she didn't make any effort for his or her purpose of life.
Then he or she is a genius so he or she has a lot of talents, but he or she won't show his or her abilities to the other people.
But if someone hasn't any talents but he or she made efforts, he or she will succeed his or her purpose of life.
So I think the efforts are more important than the talents.

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Hi Clara! ^^

That is true! Talents are very important. Everyone has one but we need to use it wisely to become successful. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If there are a lot of talents to me, it will be very great for living my life.
>> If I have a lot of talents, I would be living a great life. 

But, the most important thing is not a talent, it is effort.
>> But the most important thing is not talent, it is effort.

For instance, there is a genius, but he or she didn't make any effort for his or her purpose of life.
>> For instance, there is a genius, but he or she didn't make any effort for his or her purpose in life.

Then he or she is a genius so he or she has a lot of talents, but he or she won't show his or her abilities to the other people.
>> That person might be a genius or have a talent, but he/she didn't use his/her ability to become successful. 

But if someone hasn't any talents but he or she made efforts, he or she will succeed his or her purpose of life.
>> If we use talents wisely, then we can succeed in life. 

So I think the efforts are more important than the talents.
>> CORRECT
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