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If you are to start a business, what would that be and why?

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If i had a business, I want to stock.
I want to make a lot of money with stocks.^^

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Hi Emma ! ^^

The best option is always to make or sell a product or service that you know about and love. If you¡¯re looking for someplace to score a short-term hit just for the sake of reaping a financial gain, that¡¯s fine – get in; make your money; and get out. But if you¡¯re looking to start a business for the long haul that suits your temperament, your strengths and the lifestyle you want, you must choose a business that you love.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

If i had a business, I want to stock.
>> If I had a business, I want it to be about the stock market. 

I want to make a lot of money with stocks.
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