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If you are to start a business, what would that be and why?

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If i had a business, I want to stock.
I want to make a lot of money with stocks.^^

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Hi Emma ! ^^

The best option is always to make or sell a product or service that you know about and love. If you¡¯re looking for someplace to score a short-term hit just for the sake of reaping a financial gain, that¡¯s fine – get in; make your money; and get out. But if you¡¯re looking to start a business for the long haul that suits your temperament, your strengths and the lifestyle you want, you must choose a business that you love.

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If i had a business, I want to stock.
>> If I had a business, I want it to be about the stock market. 

I want to make a lot of money with stocks.
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