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Some countries have introduced laws to limit working hours for employees. Why are these laws introdu

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To reduce working hours is absolutely positive way especially for developing countries because people in those countries are working too much compared to the advanced countries. Our government has introduced laws to limit working hours up to 40 hours a week for workers in companies which are hired over 10 staffs. This law aimed to give employees having more free time after work so people can have dinner with their family and do whatever they would like to do. However, many people have complained about it because they can't afford to manage their life without overtime duty salary. The general prices in Korea are quite high although salary looks higher than most of Asian countries. The salary increasing doesn't meet the inflation rate. I can understand that companies would like to reduce the all expenses and employees want to raise their salary every year. To solve these problem I think the government has to compensate the money for companies therefore employees can enjoy their time

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To reduce working hours is absolutely positive way especially for developing countries because people in those countries are working too much compared to the advanced countries. 
>>> Reducing work hours is absolutely a positive way especially for developing countries because people in those countries are working too much compared to the advanced countries. 
Our government has introduced laws to limit working hours up to 40 hours a week for workers in companies which are hired over 10 staffs. 
>>> Our government has introduced laws to limit work hours up to 40 hours a week for workers in companies which hire over 10 staff.  
This law aimed to give employees having more free time after work so people can have dinner with their family and do whatever they would like to do. 
>>> CORRECT
However, many people have complained about it because they can't afford to manage their life without overtime salary. 
>>> CORRECT
The general prices in Korea are quite high although salary looks higher than most of Asian countries. 
>>> The cost of living in  Korea is quite high although the salary seems higher compared to companies in Asian countries. 
The salary increasing doesn't meet the inflation rate.
>>> The salary increase doesn't meet the inflation rate.
 I can understand that companies would like to reduce the all expenses and employees want to raise their salary every year. 
>>>  I can understand that companies would like to reduce all expenses and employees want a raise in their salary every year. 
To solve these problem I think the government has to compensate the money for companies therefore employees can enjoy their time. 
>>> To solve these problem I think the government has to compensate for companies therefore employees can enjoy their time. 
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