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What are the most important things your parents taught you?

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My parents taught most important thing is consideration for others. They don't like cause damage to other people. When I was young, my parents taught share my things with my cousins. At that time, I thought my mom doesn't like me. But now, I know she wants to teach me how to consideration for others. For their taught, I am good at sharing my things with others, and I can think and do my action to consider other people feeling first.

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Hello Minji! Thank you for this composition. Your parents are very good for teaching you to be considerate of other peoples feelings. They are probably very proud that you turned out to be such a good person. Keep it up! There are a few corrections with your grammar, but overall I think that this is good. Continue to improve! :)

-Teacher Ivy :)

My parents taught most important thing is consideration for others.

>> The most important thing my parents taught me, is to be considerate of others.

They don't like cause damage to other people.

>> They don't want to hurt other people.

When I was young, my parents taught share my things with my cousins.

>> When I was younger, my parents taught me to share my things with my cousins.

At that time, I thought my mom doesn't like me. But now, I know she wants to teach me how to consideration for others.

>>I thought my mom didn't like at that time, but now I know she wants to teach me to be considerate.

For their taught, I am good at sharing my things with others, and I can think and do my action to consider other people feeling first.

>>Because of that lesson, I share my things with others and I am considerate of other peoples feelings.

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