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Why do you think is it harder for old people to accept change?

작성자: 류*주
2021-07-14 323

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In fact, there are teo reasons of old people are more harder to accept change than the younger.
First, they are too old so they feel tired if they do just a small something.
And I think accepting the society's change is very difficult to them.
Second, this society's changes are more faster than the past society's changes.
After World Wars, the global age was open to every people.
In the past, there were so many kingdoms and they just developed there civillizatian in a kingdom.
But nowadays, it is the age of global so all of people can develope this world.
Because of that, the society's changes are going faster than before.
I think there will be more reasons about it, but whatever the reason is, we have to understand them.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi John! ^^

To be honest, It isn’t hard for old people to change, if they want to. Many of them don’t want to because they like the routine that they have found for themselves after a lifetime of trial and error.

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon.

In fact, there are teo reasons of old people are more harder to accept change than the younger.
>>In fact, there are ten reasons why old people are more harder to accept change than the younger people. 

First, they are too old so they feel tired if they do just a small something.
>> First, they are too old so they feel tired if they do new things. 

And I think accepting the society's change is very difficult to them.
>>And I think accepting society's changes is very difficult to them.

Second, this society's changes are more faster than the past society's changes.
>> Second, the society changes very fast compared to before. 

After World Wars, the global age was open to every people.
>> After the World Wars, the global age has been more open to the people. 

In the past, there were so many kingdoms and they just developed there civillizatian in a kingdom.
>>In the past, there were so many kingdoms and they just developed because of the civilians. 

But nowadays, it is the age of global so all of people can develope this world.
>> It is the global age already so people can develop in the world more easier. 

Because of that, the society's changes are going faster than before.
>And because of that, the changes in the society happens faster than before. 

I think there will be more reasons about it, but whatever the reason is, we have to understand them.
>>I think there will be more reasons about it, but whatever it is, we have to understand them.

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