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COVID-19 cases keeps on increasing in Korea.

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The reason why COVID-19 continues to increase in Korea is that quarantine rules are not followed well. Most young people who are relatively active are asymptomatic case, so corona spreads among young people easily. In addition, some of the vaccinated people do not wear masks. Then, they get corona. To prevent the spread of COVID-19 we must wear a mask everywhere and follow the quarantine rules until it is completely gone.

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After experiencing a sharp growth in COVID-19 cases early in the pandemic, South Korea rapidly controlled transmission while implementing less stringent national social distancing measures. This has led to substantial interest in their ¡°test, trace, isolate¡± strategy. 

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The reason why COVID-19 continues to increase in Korea is that quarantine rules are not followed well. 
>> CORRECT

Most young people who are relatively active are asymptomatic case, so corona spreads among young people easily. 
>>Most young people, who are relatively active, are asymptomatic.  That's why the virus spreads among young people easily. 

In addition, some of the vaccinated people do not wear masks.
>> CORRECT

Then, they get corona. 
>> Then, they get infected. 

To prevent the spread of COVID-19 we must wear a mask everywhere and follow the quarantine rules until it is completely gone.
>> To prevent the spread of COVID-19, we must wear a mask everywhere and follow the quarantine rules until it is completely gone.

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