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Does society do enough for people who feel suicidal to stop them from taking their own lives?

: I think there is no enough system that can help people who have hard time in Korea. Actually, I am getting involved in society research project in school. And my research topic is about korean school psychology consultation system. Me and my team member think more effective counsel systems and prevention should be existed for students. It is so perfunctory and gives no help to students.

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Hello, Michelle! ^^
Thank you so much for doing your homework.
Enjoy your weekend! :)

~ Teacher Tricia

I think there is no enough system that can help people who have hard time in Korea. 
>> I think there is no enough system that can help people who have a hard time in Korea

Actually, I am getting involved in society research project in school. 
>> Actually, I am getting involved in a society research project in school. 

And my research topic is about korean school psychology consultation system.
>> And my research topic is about the Korean school psychology consultation system.

Me and my team member think more effective counsel systems and preven
>> Me and my team members think more effective counsel systems and prevention should exist for students. 

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